This is my English expository summary is it good? Thanks in advance! Raghunandan Singh Chundawat, is a biologist from Hemis High Altitude National Park in New Delhi, India, he has observing snow leopard for more than five years, which is more than anyone has ever observed these beautiful cats. Snow leopards and common leopards are very different from each other. An example is that common leopards rely on branches and leaves for concealment while snow leopards rely on a clutter of stones. The leopard’s body is about four feet from nose to rump. The tail is so thick and mobile that it looks like the snow leopards is being followed by a python. As well used for sending signals during social encounters or to wrap itself up for the bitter cold weather. Leopards are good at hiding all they forget about is their tail. Snow leopards besides being secretive, well camouflaged, and usually solitary, are very active at night usually in the twilight hours. They live in the most feared part of India which is not only the Himalayas and Karakoram, the Plateau of Tibet and adjoining Kunlun; the Hindu Kush, Pamirs, and Tian Shan; the Alty, Zazakhstan, Russia and the Sayan chain west of Lake Bikal, but also Mongolia’s border with China. Snow Leopards are supposed to be officially protected by the 1975 Convention on International Trade in Endangered Species but they are still being hunted down for their coat, which is worth a fortune in the black market. The current population is from 4,000 to 7,000 but authorities fear that it may have dropped to 3,500. With 5 of the countries having a range of 200 or fewer snow leopards these beautiful cats will soon be gone. I got this from a national geographic magazine Im going into 9th grade and we we're supposed to read 3 articles and write and expository summary. Ill be posting the other 2 in sometime.
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that is very very good, however, saying that Mr. Chundawat is the person who has observed the snow leopard the longest is not factually correct. It is just written that he is the longest observer. Its here-say.... Good job!!! Good luck.........
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It's not bad, although I don't know what grade you're in or what exactly the assignment was. If I'd asked you to do a summary I would be marking you down for using so many examples; the purpose of a summary is to give the main information, not examples (Example: They live in the most feared part of India which is not only the Himalayas and Karakoram, the Plateau of Tibet and adjoining Kunlun; the Hindu Kush, Pamirs, and Tian Shan; the Alty, Zazakhstan, Russia and the Sayan chain west of Lake Bikal, but also Mongolia’s border with China). Double-check and see that all your sentences are complete (Example: As well used for sending signals during social encounters or to wrap itself up for the bitter cold weather) and that you've conjugated your verbs correctly (Example: the snow leopards is being followed) Also, have some serious comma problems. Do NOT separate the subject and verb of a sentence with a comma (Example: Raghunandan Singh Chundawat, is a biologist).
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Raghunandan Singh Chundawat is a biologist from Hemis High Altitude National Park in New Delhi, India. He has been observing snow leopard for more than five years which is more than anyone has ever observed these beautiful cats. (above is edited because it was a run-on sentence. 1. No need to use that first comma after Chundwat. 2. no comma before the which because you don't have a complete sentence afterwards (subject and predicate). If a comma separates a compound sentence, it must be balanced on both sides (left and right of comma) with both sides having a sub and predicate. ~~~~~~~~~~~ The tail is so thick and mobile that it looks like the snow leopard is being followed by a python. As well, it is used for sending signals during social encounters or to wrap itself up for the bitter cold weather. 1. took off plural off snow leopard ``````````````` Leopards are good at hiding -- all they forget about is their tail. 1. this was a run on, and the above hypen solved that. `````````````````````````` With five of the countries having a range of 200 or fewer snow leopards these beautiful cats will soon be gone. 1. with smaller numbers, spell it out
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